Friday, May 31, 2013

Argument



Statement: In this world there are so many lollies that children love. Sweet lollies,  taseteful lollies, sugar lollies, jelly beans can make children really happy.

Children should not eat lollies. Children’s teeth could turn black and fall out. This means that they will need to go to a dentists. Brushing your teeth will be really important..

Eating too much lollies could make you sick. You could probably end up in hospital. Also you may get a  sore stomach. The best thing that I think should happen is eat a lolly twice a week, so you can’t get sick.

When you eat too much lollies, you may end up with diabetes. You could eat lollies but not too much.

Eating too much lollies can make you FAT. Like a man over in America he ate too much lollies and then grew obese. Your child can eat lollies but by my point of view I think they shouldn’t eat too much lollies.

When kids eat too much sugar they get HYPER and very silly. Don’t give too many lollies away to your child. Never give your child over 5 lollies a day. Why? Because there are bad things that could happen to your child. And it will be a waste of money.

2 comments:

  1. Hey Tauwhare,

    What a good argument. You sure made you're point, and very clearly too. I like how you have explained why children shouldn't eat too much lollies. You used such great vocabulary. Keep up the amazing work!

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  2. Hi Tuawhare,
    You are right about eating too much lollies and yes it was true that man in America ate too much lollies. I really love it how you wote that post to warn those kids to not each to much lollies.

    From Raeleen

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