Friday, November 4, 2011


One day I wished if I could fly to space and land on a planet. One night I had a dream of going to Jupiter with my friends, TeRina and Lola. We zoomed up into space in a Rocket and landed on Jupiter. WOW... This is an bizarre planet. I asked Lola and TeRina if Jupiter is the biggest planet in space. "YES," they both replyed back.
Is Jupiter always this colour. Puting one step on Jupiter it felt like I was stepping on hard rock. I was wondering if any one has being on Jupiter before beside Lola, TeRina and me. Hmmmmmm, "What are you doing Tauwhare," asked TeRina. Nothing, just thinking what would it look like if we saw green and purple aliens on this Planet. "I don't know" said TeRina.

Lola said "Look Guys," looking worried. "What," we both said. "There is a big, fat and ugly Monster," We all ran on Jupiter which was hard. Getting use to it was really difficult. Stepping on the craters felt like a comet has just hit Jupiter. "We have lost the ugly beast" TeRina said. "We are so lucking" Lola Replyed.

"Now what are we going to do." TeRina said. "I wont to go home," Lola said. "We don't know our way back to the rocket," I said. We were thinking for a while. Then TeRina came up with a plan. "Lets all go together, Lola will distract the monster, then after that we will all run to the rocket hop in it then, fly back to earth" Sighed Te Rina. "But how would we know our way back," I asked. "Follow our foot-prints," Replied TeRina.

We found the rocket hop in it and flew back to earth. Wake up Tauwhare Get ready for school. I got to school and told everyone about my dream. I wish I could have another dream like that again.

The End

1 comment:

  1. Hi, my name is Sarah and I am a student in EDM310 at the University of South Alabama. I really enjoyed your story. It was cool that you described the planet in your story with great detail. The only things that I saw that could be changed was the white letters should be changed to black because it would be easier to read. I also saw that you made a few mistakes in your wording so you should read your blog or get someone else to read it before you turn it in. Keep up the good work.

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